Friendship (poem)

[><Lamaenic><]

Friendship

What is it
That makes a true friend?
Is it that willingness to
Stand with you with a will that's unbending
Loyalty unending
Yet not condescending?

Hmpf.
There's no use pretending.
Friends know the face behind the mask
No matter how tight the string.
Dilating-berating you until you bleed
Keeping you on your toes-
No one knows you but them.

If you are a true friend you have no life
From your chaps
Nor ever could you lapse into pure lies
And become of sighs or any other form
That denies yourself to them.

Never can you forget your friends you'll always
Try to make amends a friendship this
Strong never ends.

[danielazarc]

I like it. Nice concept of what friendship is. And I like the writing scheme you use, it flows nicely along with what you've got written. :3

[Dalton]

Its about me =)

[Signore Kai]

What is it
That makes a true friend?
Is it that willingness to
Stand with you with a will that's unbending
Loyalty unending
Yet not condescending?

This flows pretty well. The only thing I can say is perhaps "Yet totally not condescending?" instead of what you have.

Hmpf.
There's no use pretending.
Friends know the face behind the mask
No matter how tight the string.
Dilating-berating you until you bleed
Keeping you on your toes-
No one knows you but them.

I actually laughed when I read this. This is so true. Good verse.

If you are a true friend you have no life
From your chaps
Nor ever could you lapse into pure lies
And become of sighs or any other form
That denies yourself to them.

This verse is the only one that's a bit awkward. The flow here seems a bit forced and unnatural.

Never can you forget your friends you'll always
Try to make amends a friendship this
Strong never ends.

I like this verse as well.

Usually I really dislike poems that break sentences up into multiple lines seemingly mid-sentence, but somehow I like it here. Good job!