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Post by spiritheartlady on Mar 22, 2009 20:08:41 GMT
Green Home By Lori Triggs Copyrighted 2009
I wish to have a green home to look like A sinter block stucco 4 or 5 bedroom Italian villa home With one floor even two master bedrooms and master baths.
I wish to have a green home made of Reclaimed light woods with marbles, Glass tiles even gradients the look of new.
I wish for many long with wide windows even Long with wide double windows to see from, And with fancy French doors in the bedrooms even den.
I want reclaimed blue jeans for installation for the home With solar panels even water wells are off the grid with Energy saving appliances and furnace that is very green to me.
I want a green home with polished brass faucets even fancy knobs With towel racks of the same to look sleek and shiny even new, Sinter block stucco wall 10 to 20 feet high with iron gates opens as sliders.
I want allot of lush gardens with Butterfly bushes, all butterfly plants, even Hummingbird plants even dragonfly planets with palm trees too So I can sit and write in the lay Nile or by the pool even in the gardens.
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Post by Signore Kai on Mar 24, 2009 18:31:57 GMT
The imagery painted in my head is strong. I can relate to this because I am, too, trying to save as much energy as I can, within my household. Far too much energy wasted, I think. There are some awkward parts though. I noticed you tend to try to not use words like "or" and "and", or you use them at places that I myself normally wouldn't use. It's probably your style of writing, but personally I find it a bit distracting. I want a green home with polished brass faucets even fancy knobs"... brass faucets and even fancy knobs" would be what I would write. But hey, I think this is your style of writing, and I respect that. Also, there are quite some spelling errors. Shiny, not shinny, a lot and not allot. Try to take note of such small details. Use the spell-check!
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Post by spiritheartlady on Mar 25, 2009 20:10:56 GMT
Ty Signore Kai, I will fix it and I hinting to my uncle to help buy me the green home with what I want in it.
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